Yae Jin Oh

Ten Seed Sentences

1. I once felt that what I was before did not have as much significance as who I was now, but now I see that who I am is but an evolution of the past self with just a touch more wisdom.

2. With anything imperfect, my parents saw failure—I know now that being their daughter took me away from myself.

3. Once my naivete was so great it brushed the stratosphere; now, having sacrificed it in a rush to grow up, I see my view of the world has dimmed with sadness.

4. Never had I used the" road less traveled by", but once I did, the route my life has taken changed me more than following others a hundred times had.

5. I loved drawing but I quit out of respect for my parents' wishes although I soon learned that it meant rejecting a part of me. Now I secretly hope that they will challenge me again with such an order so that I can prove how much stronger I have become.

6. Once I was young; Now I feel like I am even younger, for my heart trembles like an infant at the consequences of aging.

7. Before, my life was sheltered, protected carefully by my family; now I can feel myself changing in college—a chance that I both fear and welcome, for you cannot live without changing.

8. Once I was lost, but was found by people who cared and became my friends, yet sometimes I feel like I have not found myself.

9. I used to struggle between the clash of two cultures, because becoming more familiar with one dragged me away from the other until I realized that what I was trying to do was comparable to mashing an orange and an apple together rather than mixing them into a fruit salad.

10. I would dread the idea of another obstacle that would inevitably come after overcoming a previous one until I realized how much stronger and wiser each one made me.

Revised Sentences

1. Once, my naivete was so great it brushed the stratosphere—so grand that one might have been envious of my innocent joy; now, having sacrificed it in a rush to grow up, I see that my view of the world has dimmed with sadness.

2. With anything imperfect, my parents saw failure— being their daughter meant that I could not be me.

3. I once believed that who I was before had little significance as to who I was in the present, but now I see that who I am is simply and evolution of the past self with just a touch more wisdom.